I give this an "A". I just want to start off and say "wow". That was such a great story pumped full of adrenaline. In the beginning he stated that him and his team were ready to turn heads and make nay-sayers into believers. And in the next few paragraphs he did indeed deliver on that promise. He had great imagery, one that especially captured my attention was "Every time i touched the puck my entire shoulder felt like it was pushed up against a burning red, hot iron." It really helped me to feel his pain and his struggle. The topic was very well defined and didn't go off topic once in his narrative about the game. The transitions were nice and clean. Nice to see the coaches "half-time" speech so to say. (Not a big hockey fan, don't know quite what to call the in between period where that took place was) The conclusion showed that he didn't give up on his team and they made more then believers out of those who watched and heard about that game.

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