I would give this paper an "A". I really like how the narrative is all in one big flashback, it is very original. The use of imagery is very good, it let me get into the story and feel how bad you wanted to be on the varsity and how bad it hurt you not to make it twice in a row. I also enjoyed the fact that your paper sort of evolved from in the beginning you were on jv to being on varsity and thinking about quitting to your junior year realizing why the coach pushed you all so hard. It was a very fluid story from beginning to the end with nice transitions.
TinoMontanez
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